Paradise

I, in my opinion, believe that a certain paradise is an ideal place or state in which somebody finds perfect happiness, other than being regarded as Heaven or the Garden of Eden. Thus one can find a particular 'seventh heaven' here on Earth. =]

Reading this adorable piece enchants me at the least. Thank you for sharing! Regards, Debbie

I'll rewrite it with corrections for you =]

There's a place out there
That's like a Fantasy;
This place is like no other
(...So bright and beautiful...) [or replace with whatever you wish]

It(')s full of roses, tulips and daisies too(,)
Beautiful waterfalls curving down streams(;)
Trees as high as can be(.)
Birds chirping and playing
While butterflies fly beautifully in the sky(.)

The wind blow(s) slightly to the right
As the grass dances through the night
Bees buzzing in sw(arms) of O's
While the stars shine so vividly...

That(')s what you call Paradise.

An odd poem... not particuarly my type but well written all the same. Sounds too much like earth to be paradise, honestly... But all the same, it's very well written.

I don't really know what to say... I'm not really that big of a fan of nature poems.

=]
Well written,
5/5
~Stephen White

I love this...
The imagery you used here created very vivid pictures and had a calming and relaxing effect on me.
The opening really pulls the reader into the poem and from there on it gets better.

I like this. It is indeed my idea of paradise... :)

Note: "Its full of roses, tulips and daisy's too"
Shouldn't it read "It's full of roses, tulips and daisies too"?

Great job!!!

Josie

Very baeutiful poem...lovely work...u've given a clear visual image of the whole thing..kp it up!
xxPoojaxx