My Tears Shall Awaken You

by Italian Stallion   May 17, 2007


My tears shall awaken you,
Upon this glimmering starlight night.
Our journeys together have been wonderful,
As you've showed me the way to love and care.

Sitting here with you on such an excellent night,
Pondering whether or not, my tears will show.
Our love for one another, is so simply pure,
These tears are a symbol of my feelings towards you.

You make me happy, sometimes sad too,
But through out our journeys we've mended as one.
These tears that flow freely down my cheeks,
Hope they awaken you from deep within.

My feelings are true, but I'm sure you knew,
My love for you will always be, till eternity.
These tears I cry, are tears of happiness,
For you, my love, light up my world.

*Written for a contest*

© Copyright 2007 By: Italian Stallion

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  • 15 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I really liked this poem Joe. I think that my favorite thing about it was that the lines didn't rhyme. While I love rhymed poems I think that sometimes it takes away from the strength of the message and this message was sure powerful. When I first read the title I thought that it was going to be about death, or sadness I didnt expect a love poem. Turned my idea of the title completly around, well done. The only thing that I would change is I would get rid of all of the I's you's My's etc and so forth. Reading them over and over sort of take away from the poem's beauty. Nice write though.

  • 17 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    Wow, truly touching. I loved the pure romance to this piece. The imagery was fantastic, obviously about a truly passionate love. Well done, Greta.

  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle

    That was very goodd.. keep up the good word..

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I though that it was sweet. The word choice was great and the flow was very nice. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Aweeeh! Very cute. I love how you can write so many love poems and each one is still so different than the others. You had a great start to this poem as well as a strong ending, so kudos on that..this was all in all a really good poem. I loved it. (:

    5.5
    =]

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