Slowly killing me, but I love you (lento)

by Anonymous Angel   May 17, 2007


Do you have any idea what you're doing to me?
My heart is slowly dying, every time you raise your fist.
Two years I'm with you, and it all started out nice
sky searching for falling stars, our first date, the first time we kissed,

Take a look at us now, you can't stay away from the alcohol,
I have seen you drunk too many times and I'm scared every night
Fake smiles and hiding the bruises,I know its wrong but I still love you
Dry my tears and keep hoping everything will be alright.

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#for a challenge#

A Lento consists of two quatrains with a fixed rhyme scheme of abcb, defe as the second and forth lines of each stanza must rhyme.
To take it a step further, but not required, try rhyming the first and third lines as well as the second and forth lines of each stanza in this rhyming pattern: abab, cdcd.
The fun part of this poem is thrown in here as all the FIRST words of each verse should rhyme.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Oh wow I didn't want this poem to end it was so heartbreaking beautfiul. I have never read anything in this style before so it was refreshing and a joy to read. The descriptions were great and the words you used werent simple and fit everything nicely. Well done *5/5*

  • 17 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Wow, this is a very powerful poem. I know exactly what you mean. Great job!!! 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 17 years ago

    by Kyle

    Awww what a wonderful poem! i loved how you wrote this, lol its awesome! i had to look back to see if the first words rhymed and they did!! lol great job! im sorry though if this poem is how you really feel, i hope everything turns out okay.

  • 17 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    U commented me like a long time ago! i say THANX and WOAH!!!!!!! it was awsome!

  • 17 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    A different style magnificently written. You really have a way with words that I am quite impressed with. I enjoy reading your work and this of course is no exception. Props! 5/5

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