Wow!!!!!!!.....BEAUTIFUL!!.just perfect n the way u've tried a new style is so much good.....lovely work...filled with beauty!!....n the information provided wil give the readers sure knowledge about this style n your talents too..kp up the good job!
xxPoojaxx

This is a beautiful poem way sad I hope this is not based off of something u went through

I like this poem very much. good work. i like the rhyme schem to it. and i can relate to this poem.. very well written

This is a really cool poem...I haven't seen too many people attempt that type of rhyming structure, and you did it well! As for the topic of this poem, I've been in the same EXACT situation you describe, and it's a very horrible thing, but get through it and everything will be ok. If you're talking about yourself, GET OUT!!! That's the only way you're going to save yourself! Great poem, 5/5 from me! :)

Wow, this is really good. I've been writing poetry for a very long time and tried so many styles but ive never seen this one so it had me interested straight from that. The ryhme was great steph and the flow was just amazing. Well done with this poem~mel

Aww that is so wonderfuly written. I loved it! I could feel alot of emotion in it..well done. Xx Chrissie

A great poem.
very nicely written, you are a great poem, always love ur poems
keep it up
a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

This is an interesting theme. Well written. Keep wrting.

/Nicely done. with a great story behind it, its a really sad subject though, but something many people go through. I'm so sorry if this happened to you~ loved the poem though

All right.
I like it, but I'm going to have to burst your bubble.

On a Lento, the first line of ALL lines must rhyme; not every other or abab scheme. =/ Just thought I'd tell you.

I would honestly not try to fix it; I reallly like the poem how it is.

Nicely done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

OMG I cant completly relate to this poem cuz i have been in this situation! I love it and it makes me want to cry! 5/5 fo sho!

This was nicely written. i cant say specifically what I like about it, but i like it. thanks for the comment!

5/5.

Very nicely penned. It was so sad, too. You made it really easy for the reader to feel the emotions. A joy to read.

Wow.
This just seemed really off to me.
It was just hard to read.
I read it a couple of times to make sure
But it just didn't seem right.

What I usually do for flow,
It usually works, at least for me,
Is that I count the syllables.
For example:

Do you have any idea what you're doing to me? [[14]]
My heart is slowly dying, every time you raise your fist. [[14]]
Two years I'm with you, and it all started out nice [[12]]
sky searching for falling stars, our first date, the first time we kissed, [[15]]

Actually, that didn't seem bad at all.
But try to keep the syllable count 10 or less.
It just seems overwhelming if you don't.

Also, this seems really forced.
Like you don't know what to say
So you just make up this line that
Rhymes with your thing at the end.

It was a great topic, but I don't think
Your poem did justice to it.

I don't want to vote.
And ruin your 5.0
If I did, I would probably vote a 3.
If you want me to, PM me :]

Oh, I forgot to say I'm sorry.
And I do mean it :[

You should never let anyone push you around or beat you or take advantage of you, you are worth much more than an abuser. You should never deal with that. Overall this poem is amazing. The emotion is huge and the flow and everything is very very good!! 5/5

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Great poem. I wish it was longer but it is great the way it is. 5/5

I loved it!
The flow was a bit off here and there, but amazing. :]
not any mistakes, as I can see.

good job hun.
5/5

I'm sure this poem presented quite a challenge at first, but you have finished rather nicely. I loved the flow and the unique way this poem is written with all the different rhymes. You can tell by my poetry that i'm a fan of rhyming lol fantastic job 5/5

This was so sad, I dont know what it was about this, but i loved it. The emotion was awesome, and the imagery was great
well done
xxxx