My heart is slowly dying, every time you raise your fist.
^ I'm pretty sure "every time" is one word.

Two years I'm with you, and it all started out nice
^ I think it would sound better if it was "I've been with you" instead of "I'm with you".

Fake smiles and hiding the bruises,I know its wrong but I still love you
^ I think it would sound better if it was "hidden bruises" instead of "hiding the bruises".

Dry my tears and keep hoping everything will be alright.
^ This is too short to keep the flow. Try adding in a word or two.

The fun part of this poem is thrown in here as all the FIRST words of each verse should rhyme.
^ It says the first words of each verse should rhyme. I am assuming that means the first word of the word line of each stanza right? They do not rhyme.

Awh, this was good. It was sad and had emotion. The flow was good most of the time and your descriptions worked. I would work on your vocabulary. But other than that, nicely done. 5/5

Very talented writer, u are =]
5/5
Geo

Excellent poem love the way you wrote it, came out beautifully written, very sad, sorry if you have to go through that, no woman should, great job, keep it up , your friend Tracy dean, 5/5

Touching

This poem is sad, and very relateable. I also like the style. 5/5

Ravyn

Oh cool i like this kind of poem it does sound fun to write. You did a good job writing this poem and i give you 5/5

Oh wow, its short but so powerful! a strong meaning and full of detailed emotion. i loved it. reminded me of that movie, provoked. dont know if youve heard of it..but yeh, it did.
nuff luv, dont stop writing xx

I read your poem and found it quite interesting. Nice words and good flow kept my attention. I look forward to reading more of your works to see what appears when they are turned over.

Fantastic poem i like lento's think lol they are interesting, well good job and thx for the comment:):)

keenan

I've never read something like a Lento before, but I sure did like it =] I know the feeling of people changing in a relationship. And I love the way you expressed it here =)
5/5 for this =]!
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Hey geweldig gedicht maar dat wist je al kom ook eens bij mij kijken mischien kun je me dan advies geven :)

All i have to say is you did a great job! i can relate to it i was in a realtionship for 2 happy years then i started getting abused and its hard to walk away...well you did an amazing job 5/5 <33

Good!

short but you had transfer your message through it, nicely done..

keep it up!

Sad story, great poem. But then....the saddest stories make the most beautiful poems, don't they?

Keep writing!

5/5 Ingrid( Mooi werk, meisje!)

A different style magnificently written. You really have a way with words that I am quite impressed with. I enjoy reading your work and this of course is no exception. Props! 5/5

U commented me like a long time ago! i say THANX and WOAH!!!!!!! it was awsome!

Awww what a wonderful poem! i loved how you wrote this, lol its awesome! i had to look back to see if the first words rhymed and they did!! lol great job! im sorry though if this poem is how you really feel, i hope everything turns out okay.

Wow, this is a very powerful poem. I know exactly what you mean. Great job!!! 5/5

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Oh wow I didn't want this poem to end it was so heartbreaking beautfiul. I have never read anything in this style before so it was refreshing and a joy to read. The descriptions were great and the words you used werent simple and fit everything nicely. Well done *5/5*