Comments : Start Over

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    I liked this one because it sounded so pure and the way you told it was in a way that people can understand and probably apply to thier own life

    "Recalling all the mistakes I made
    Never did I try to rectify any
    Wondering how one person
    Could possibly make so many."

    If i could just suggest maybe changing the second line to "Never did i rectify any", just to keep the flow in check as when i read it aloud it sounds one or two syllables off

    But it's amazing all the same.
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    And again another beautiful poem! flow was flawless well done good choice of words! :) 5/5 as always!

  • 17 years ago

    by the simple girl

    Extremely well written, your point comes across very clearly. Keep up the great work.

    ~Ashley