Aww good poem, its hard to loose a relationship. 4/5

"My heart has been torn,
torn to pieces from that one day."
Beutiful thoughtgul lines...intense n just so filled wth emotions..u've expressed heartbreak well throught this poem...Good wrk..Kp it up!5/5!!
xxPoojaxx

I enjoyed this.
The emotion and depth shine shrough the words, and the ending is very intense.
The only thing that threw me a little was that some parts rhymed and some didn't.
Apart from that however it was beautiful.

This poem is really beautiful...
very emotional...
the flow is really nice...
the rhyme scheme is quite original...=)
5/5
keep going
*isabel*

You're right the idea is pretty cliche to be nicely yet since you are the writer it is you only who can tell us the poem's true meaning. Is it just an idea that you wanted to try and could not lift above the other semi-decent poems written here (Maybe try adding metaphors? Descriptions? Back up your emotions?) Is it a poem healing from a true experience? In that case who is one to judge the quality of healing. THe idea of the face paint just didn't seem to want to lift off the ground and shortly fell flat. Good luck with your writing though.

What a beautifull write ,and I felt the emotion in it as I read it.We are who we are ,what we look like on the outside should not matter ,its what we have on the inside ,for we all have feelings and we all feel love ,hurt and pain.this one had me thinking of days gone by and my time at school ,I was the short ,fat kids with glasses and got picked on daily ,I wanted to hide but there was no were to hide.

You are a great and amazing writer. It's just one of those poems when you can feel all the emotion. Great job.

Lost in a diguse. that was really good. I liked this one. the flow was great and again the emtion strong. 4/5

Alright job. A little juvenile. Work on improving your rhymes and use stronger adjectives. Keep writing and you'll keep improving!

Omg I LOVE the last line,its so cute...i love this 5/5 keep it up!

It was good and emotion felt
but I just felt something was missing
good job!

Try to stay away from the necessaries.
For example, articles and pronouns.
They make a poem turn awkward.
They ruin the flow.
At least that is only in my opinion.
Throughout this whole poem
It felt really forced.
This line especially:
Why did this have to happen,
Whats the reason i have to hurt from deep within.
I don't know.
Your poem caught my attention.
Your wording was okay.
It was just the format of your writing, I guess.
All in all, it was "okay"
4/5?

I really liked this poem..but i would like to help you to make it flawless

First hun...It would be really good if you capitalize the 'i's and make the first letters capitalized

Other than those it was really sad and sorrowful
Keep it up,
Laura

Really lovely poem, i don't care what the others think its a 5/5 for me, keep it up i love your poems, Bree xxx

This is a really good poem. So true too. I have a one year old and I don't tell the people I date at first and than when they find out they are done thats kinda like face paint. i hide him till Ithink everything is okay than I tell them and they don't stay with me

Dont let him get ya down ur very pretty and im not just saying that to make u feel better its the truth.

Wow. This poem was beautiful, unique, and heartbreaking. I could once more, feel the depression you're desrcibing. But trust me, honey, everything will turn out okay, and one day you will wonder why you ever liked him in the first place. Beautifully written poem!

5/5

This title deffinately caught my eye. I'm very glad I read this. It is loving but yet sad at the same time. 5/5

Aww im sure your not ugly and life is a bit*h to some and the bi*chy its nice too ironik really :S anyway im really liking your style of writing even after these 4 poems il be reading more of your work!

Great poem...i really enjoyed reading it..and sometimes i feel the exact same way... it can be tough...but eventually it will pass...

amazing poem.5/5