Wow, this is such an almost chilling poem, yet at the same time, it is really amazing and beautiful. your use of words makes it echo, so that the reader remembers it still after reading. thx for the comment
5/5
gabriella

This is an amazing poem. Seems we are fighting for the same things lol

Well i have to say im like you and i dont think ive ever heared of a "rictameter" before now either. Im assuming its the rhyramid type of poem? Its really cool. I liked the structure of this. I liekd the flow of this poem. It was quite short yet enjoyable. I liekd the repition of "Echoes" at the end. i liked you usage of alliteration; "Forever fail" it created this sense and it wmade the reader remmeber these words and kinda think about them when thinking about the poem. An enjoyable read. I would suggest you use a more varied punctuation though. Keep it up!! xx

Great poem. Sad it's too short I want to read more. 5/5.

Good work!

Ray

Well well
what can I say
awesome as always
you know the world is so messed up and societies ideas about how we should act and what a teenager should be like and think are even more messed upits good that you use empathy and want to learn about what others feel and what they go through
loved it!
love you !

To wite different styles of poetry you have to be quite talented and from what i've read you are. This poem was chilling and an interesting read. Well done on a nicely penned poem. ~mel

thankyou for the comment by the way =)

Thanks for the comment.
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It really is sad how people are in this day in age. I would say our society and our time is one of the worst. All morals aside, it seems. I don't know...but I felt I definitely needed to voice my opinion on it.

This is short, but says a lot at the same time.
"We Forever fail to hit a right note"
That is very true. Good write. :]

Excellent write from you my friend, wonderfully written and a great choice of words, sad and so very true, you did a great job, a pleasure to read ,keep it up , your friend Tracy d 5/5

Very interesting and excellently written poem. It is deep. Atmosphere that you created is superb. 5/5 Short but very powerful poem.