Today I Am,Tomorrow I Won't

by Tricky Daze   May 18, 2007


Your eyes soaked up with tears,
By the pain of getting me caught.
You say that I was someone that cares,
Yesterday I was,Today I'm not.

I was attracted to just your cover,
But being your wife forever,I cannot.
You got to accept I'm no longer your lover,
Yesterday I was,Today I'm not.

Left you alone just to find embrace
That will make erase all the don't
To make me forever alive and ace
Today I am,tomorrow I won't.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked the rhyming it gave the poem a nice strong flow. I really liked the word choice and the format I think was just right. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Forever,( )I

    was,( )Today

    COMMA'S require SPACES after them =] Just letting you know! =]

    That will make erase all the don't = the order is screwed up. The line seems unreadable.

    am,( )tomorrow

    Well written, dear. Remember, spaces after comma's!
    I don't really have anything else to say. Sorry about the first comment, I accidentally pressed comment.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Was someone that = someone who

    was,Today I'm = was,( )Today I( a)m

  • 17 years ago

    by Simply Josh

    Very well done yet again Laura. The repetition worked very well and gave more emotion in the poem. This was a great read.
    cheer, josh

  • 17 years ago

    by xo kisses xo

    Thats is a beautiful poem. its very good! i loved it!!! deff a 5/5!!!

    xo kisses xo

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