Well, it's well written, for sure, your vocabulary is just fine. But the lack of stanzas makes it seem more like prose than poetry. It's not an insult, I'm just feeling something missing that could really cinch this as a good poem. Know what I mean? Just, yeah, it could do with not being in a paragraph, I suppose. But aside from layout, it's really, truly well written, and for that you must certainly be congratulated~

Oh wow, MUCH better!!!!!

I love the
assocation
of tears
with the
ocean. this
was by far
my favorite
poem of
yours. thank
you for the
read and
keep it up.
l_l

Ooh I liked this one, and I also agree the black oceans as tears was a good idea that I probably never would of thought of. I felt the sadness of this poem, and that is what makes it unique, the feeling. Good job =)

~*Caitlin*~

Really good