Its good.. poetry shouldnt really be criticized.. but ill just giv a few helpful tips that you dont have to take.. one is you might want to use one rhyme scheme and stick to it, another to make the poem make more sense to the reader is break up your lines more.. dont write them like paragraghs.. like when one sentence is finished go to the next lineok well it was a good poem and it had a nice beat in it = ] 4/5 from me

Compared to those girls you are perfect...(at least your not a prep who goes around selling your body to whoever) *cough* like tia *cough* lol but no really your more perfect than edward...and you know thats saying something