It's a beautiful 1..very good write..powerful...well described |
OMG that was so...so....omg i cant even put into words how much i love this poem! i have to add it to my favorites! |
by Black night
Nice one mate, a real good read, loved the transition between the darkness and the happier times. Really worked, in a kinda morbid, depressing, suicidal kinda way. |
by Brittany C
Cool poem. I liked how you set it up. 5/5 |
Excellent flow to this write. Reality mixed with the memories from the past. A truly believable write. |
Powerful Write!! |
by Jenni Marie
I liked how you went from happy to dark. |
Amazing imagery, the whole life flashes before the final thoughts. Excellent work. |
by Kaila
Woah.. |
"darkness, death, the waiting, all bad |
by Boy
Very good use of words. and ryming scheme was also nice. flow of owrds was so good. take care |
by jade sturdy
Excellent. Really enjoyed reading a mans perspective on this subject. Its something that has never fazed me, but i can understand how it would other people. Remember the only certain thing in life is death. Keep writing mate. Im new at this so hope this does not cause any offence. Jade |
by Stephanie
"a gun shot, the silence breaks |
Wow David that was really gppd i loved the flow in it. good job |
by Sara
Wow that was amazing... you have a way with words, and everything in this poem flowed so nicely... the imagery in that poem was excellent... 5/5 from me, and thanks so much for the comment, i really appreciate it! |
by Jade
This is an awesome poem. |
by Kayla
Ive been reading your poems and For some reason, i just connect to them, your really good |
Very stong |
by chind
Wow this is an awesome as poem |
by Goran Rahim
Wow, this was so touching...... i really love the way you came up with this idea, it was so unique. a 5/5 from me as u really deserve it. keep it up |