by just me
Very frightening but very well written and sumthing else.........idk......very disturbing.....but it is a great poem. |
by Brittany C
Great poem. Yah I think title is a good fite. I really liked this one. 5/5 |
This isnt offensive but you might wanna change the title to, Im the old lover |
by Vanessa
The title you chose is perfect. the story in this poem was a little chilling quite unnerving really, but the word choice is strong, and the emtion was deep. I think this is one of the best poems I have ever read by yu, the words aren't showoffish, and the meaning is simple, easier to understand. You have outdone yourself this time. I really loved this one. great job 5/5 |
by isabel
I think the title fits in...it doesn't explain too much about the poem, so the reader can get curious... |
by Delie
It's a great poem, and yeah i think the title fits... |
OMG i love this poem, not because it is scary but because it is true, i had a freind who had a 40 year old stalker and they caught him but still, its scary! Great Job! |
by Melpomene
The title i found to be perfect, It was quite intertesting, with a chilling tale lol i enjoyed this poem alot simply because the emotion from your word choice was so strong and powwerful. Really great though! loved this alot. Well done on a nicely penned poem~mel |
by Marcus
This poem was very interesting |
Very nice flow.. i like the poem... 4/5 |
First of all....Perfect title.n the poem was good...though it did have a chilling effect..the choice of words which u used to portray the emotions was great!,,,,n the flow was perfect too.kp writing! |
by Robert
Hmmm if the girl was a stranger to the man I think the title would fit very well but you left that detail abit too hazy in the piece. I liked the message it was stark and to the point but the flow was abit off and your ideas were not really focused on one train of thoght good try though I gave it a 4 keep up the good work. Plot121 |
by skynerraw
I think the title works very well, I liked the message, even though its a bit frightening, very interesting, with great emotion! |
by BreeAnna
This is really good... where did it come from?? |
by 111308
Ohhh jeeze i'm jealous |
I like this poem and the way you wrote it, short/sweet and to the point. I think many fathers feel more then just fatherly love towards their daughters, sad but true. Excellent write 5/5 |
by Miu
Unique theme again. It's so true how you bring out the male feelings in this poem. Makes it creepy. But very nicely written. |
I like this poem.. a little creepy.father and daughter... but all in all its good.. Great Vocab and Nice Flow.. 5/5 |
by Chrissie
I love the topics of your latest poems. They are all about real topics, but topics not alot of people talk about. Once again, it was flawless and well written. Well done. Xx Chrissie 5/5 |
by Live WeLL
Just as everyone else has already said.. it does give off a freaky stalker-ish vibe.. very interesting though.. i really enjoyed it.. you are a really good writer and I love the way you write about certain topics.. your style of writing is unique and your poems are very well written.. nice job.. keep it up =].. and thanks for the comments! |