An a ocean deep = in an ocean deep

!â??= ' "

Please correct the symbols =]

home wards = one word (remember the movie!)

were beautiful = were A beautiful

"As I watch the traffic pass,
You should be sitting by me,
Not inside my past."
Incredible. I just love how this whole verse (particularly those three lines) flow so beautifully.

And so many with bad luck. = that line kills the whole atmosphere of the poem. I suggest emitting it or replacing it with something else.

The last lines were extremely powerful (despite the annoying symbols) and I really did enjoy this poem. Correct those symbols, and then I will add this poem to my fav's. Wonderful job, and may your friend RIP.

5/5
~Stephen White

... RIP to Steph hun. we all miss her...

There were so powerful words in this poem hun
I really liked it
My fave lines should be,

So why do you take them?
The ones that are pure?
I know you wont answer me,
All you do is ignore.

Keep it up
Your sincere friend,
Laura

Wow I liked this poem.. very sad and very powerful. Perfect title, thats what drew me into it in the first place. We can't always question why god does what he does we just have to know that its for the better. But I know thats not something thats easy to see when you've lost someone close to you. But they are in a better place now, and we will be able to see them all together eventually when our time is up. I loved the first stanza it was beautiful, but what I liked most about the poem was the mixture of sadness, anger, and confusion that death brings with it. Well done. And although the pain of losing a close friend never goes away it does dull down eventually and you will be able to carry on again like you used to. Take care

Oh srry for the 2nd comment but I agree with everyone else.. may your friend rest in peace.