Wow, so much emotion. Thats sad. The flow was good, good use of vocab. Excellent piece!

Who did you do this collab with? cause the member needs reconnision as well.

cause for BOTH of you this poem was excellently set out and finsihed!

5/5 david

Great poem wouold be awesomer if you had put some commas in it but it has a wonderful flow and everything grreat job and thanks ofr the comment

keenan

Hey...u have'nt mentioned the name of the one u've done this collab wth..sure both of u ppl hv dsone a great job...it's a beautiful peice...filled wth soo much emotion straight from the heart...beautiful peice..kp up the good job..
5/5..Kudos!!
xxPoojaxx

A sad yet very well written piece ,made my think of a close friend of mine who I sadly lost many years ago ,and yet I still think of him.

"I have a friend who is deceased
It was a most unfortunate event
When she died my sadness was unleashed
And I was consumed in pain and torment"

The opening immediantly caught my attention as it's something i can relate to with all my heart
My poem, 'angels' (one of my first) was along the same lines of this
An excellent collab
5/5
*Gem*

Excellent poem who did u collab with on this one u should leave a link to their profile so people can comment on it for that person also.

Great poem
love it.

Really deep and sad...
you're a very good writer, i must say..=)
5/5
keep going
*isabel*

I don;t like the ending but this poem is still great. Topic is good and you created touching atmosphere. Very emotional piece... It deserves 5/5