I really liked it. I mean i can totally relate 5/5. Good Job

Love it, very nice

This is so cute icant believe you are only 14 5/5 keep it up...comment back?

I found your poem to be off.
The wordings were awkward.
The rhyming was forced.
I'm sorry of being so harsh.
But I think this could benifit you.
I love your topic, though.
The topic of what you're talking about.
I'm going to vote a 3 on this.
Do you still want me to vote?
PM me if you do :]

If you were to get down on your knees and place your two hands together and beg for attention I think that would be less subtle then this piece of work. It reminds me of a salesman that sales his product so cheaply that he cant afford to eat at the end of the day. Well that my opinion Plot121

Hey great work.very beautiful.........lol...u r only 14 n u can write so well.Good work!
the topic u choosed is good...kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

Hey,
nice poem, beautiful, but I think that some rhymes are a bit forced, the flow was great!
maybe someday she will notice you,
keep up the good work 5/5
kisses stephanie

I loved it. i can relate it to a little, keep up the good work

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Excellent piece! It flowed perfectly and it rhymed good. But in the first 2 stanzas, in my opinion, you used too much of the word 'notice' you can leave one or 2 but for the other one maybe try another word that means notice but not the woird notice, hope that made sense lol. But anyways this was a pretty good poem. Keep it up!

Great poem. It's a great write and I liked the format. I gave it a five out of five:)

Beautiful.....

I think this is a really good poem..
the rhyming is perfect but it seems like you based the whole sentences on the words that rhymed not the other way around..
but other than that the poem is totally perfect you are really talented keep it up
<3jess