I Would Give

I liked this one, it had alot of love behind it and it was so sweet, but the I's were a little overwhelming. overall nicely written, 5/5

I really liked this, it was sweet and the ending was intense and hard hitting.
Flow was good for the most part, and the emotion is clear.
The only thing I didn't like was all the I's, as that disrupted the flow at times.

This is a beautiful poem. its very sentimental. i like it a bunch. however, im a little iffy on this liine:
i would give her a giant gem
it just isnt as good as the rest of the poem.

and i like the way you ended the poem.

The words in the end were kind off I think you missed a word or two in the last part but the poem as a whale was good I loved our rythm Scheme you used but the last part well I felt missed a few words Plot121.

The last stanza threw me off a bit.. Though, I did like the repetition.. it creates patterns. I <3 patterns. The emotion for this girl, was surely there.. you did a wonderful job with this one. Hope to read more. xo.