I actually thought the ending fir quite nicely. You could use some editing, just mechanical stuff mostly. And yes, the flow is a bit off. It could use a bit of fixing, try reading it slowly to yourself, and take out a few words to make it a bit more even. Nice topic though, overall pretty good job.

The last two sentences seem to work together the last part of both sentances work with each other the first parts I would omit. Let it read something like this.....
Giggles and Pictures will be remembered to this day,
For this is the night all my pain will simply go away.
Well Thats what I think take care good work Plot121

This was a great poem that is written greatly, a poem that deserve nothing less than a 5/5.
so keep it up

Very good poem...very good choice of topic..though the last line threw the flow off...anyways good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

I like it!! very well done ,keep up the great work.

Anpther great poem. I loved the format you used and great word choice. 5/5

I like this poem.... thanx for commenting mine, i wrote it for my bf.

Ooops forgot to put this 5/5..... once again great poem :)

Hey butterfly i love this poem its great keep up the great work girl.

This was an excellent free verse about just having a good time! Sometimes that's what you need to do when life gets to be too much. Great job in describing the feeings and events in this poem!

Excellent work!

5/5

I wish this night would never end,
wishing it would just began

...this line would be better if you change 'began' to 'begin

no regrets and or shame

...this line would be better if you just stuck with one 'and' or..well 'or'

But all in all I really like this poem.^_^5/5

<3Amber

This poem is also a another good one... and again i think you should fix the way you set your poetry up....maybe put it into four line stanzas...but i still give this poem a 5/5

Interesting. 5/5

This is a light hearted ramantic poem that I enjoyed reading

Very nice, sort of a cut loose type of poem. it was well written with a good format

your servant:
atticus

^ agree

I like this poem because it finally shows a different side of you, a side that wants to let loose and have fun. Good for you and good job on the poem!

The last stanza is a bit long, it contains many short words.
The rest of the poem is nice. (: