Nice poem, it had very strong emotions in it. But i think it would sound better if it rhymed and it would have looked more presentable if you started each line with a capital letter. Great job though.

I liked the poem but i agreed with wallace just on the capitalizing the letter of each line. I found this poem to be an enjoyable read with great emotions used throughout it. Well done~mel

Great poem thanks for the comment on "Sinful obsession"

I really like this poem i havent seen u write like this before its different but i love it.

ashleigh

Hey,
nice poem, good flow and easy to read, good work!
kisses stephanie