Well you have the thoughts in here and the emotions. Actually it's nice and sweet but i better suggest that u rewrite in such a way that it will look so pleasing coz i don't know where wnd when to stop. U didn't even put some commas or semicolon or periods if ever...NICE WORK

James - That was one of the sweetest and saddest poem eye've read in quite some while. If you didn't read that poem to the girl it's written for that might be why she's gone. She might just not know how much she means to you. You seem like a sad kid who needs some lovin.
-Rachel

Great poem!!amazing job :)