I worte a poem about walking throught the hospital corridors once. So yeah thats probably why i opened this poem up. Anyways i enjoyed this poem, stright why reading this poem you come across an alliteration; "Sorrow secretly stains" this grabs the readers attention and creates this nice sound. Excellent way of opening the poem. Anyways this poem does seem quite dark. The description was really brilliant. I like the sound; "flip flop" creates. Your words can kinda make the reader seem as though they are in a hospital. An enjoyable read. Keep it up! xx

While the mouth of time hangs open
in the looseness of old age.

These lines are brilliant! I like the creepy and mysterious way you describe a hospital... Really good poem! :)

Haunting, I wrote a poem in a hospital once, though not about a hospital called codeword hummingbird, hospitals can be creepy, I'd hate to be in the one you described, good ambiance though!!