The Rambler pt.2

by Cherise   May 23, 2007


The Rambler came up
and sat down next to me
he said "Look at it through his eyes
and tell me what you see"

So then I started to look at everything
and what it could have been
what he had come to face with
and all the things he seen.

Though his choices where different
from what I would have done
Through his eyes i saw how those decisions
effected everyone.

The Rambler got up to leave
and took his eyes away
then said " Perhaps a look at his point of view,
may do you good someday"

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  • 16 years ago

    by Not

    I like this poem too many,great story you told
    short but amazing poem good work!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Blissful

    I just loved the last two lines of the poem. It is the perfect life lesson. Learn from others mistakes. Well done *5/5*

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    This one was ok compared to the first one

    but if i had only read this one and not
    the other

    i still would have given this one

    a

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    I don't think the last line is confusing, i just think people don't have enough poetic experience to figure it out. I love this one, it flowed excellently and I loved the last stanza.

    "So then I started to look at everything
    and what it could have been
    what he had come to face with
    and all the things he seen."

    You should change "he" into "he's" or "seen" into "saw".

    -Steph

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    I think this was a great continue to part one, and im hoping for a 3rd part soon.
    you have wrote this greatly and i really like your style. keep it up dear.
    a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

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