by Startle Me
First stanza? Beautiful. |
by kolorful
Liked this poem. Really good kinda of hav 2 agree ^, but otherwise good 4.75/5 |
Beautiful work....lovely...so rich wth beauty n emotions..n u've expressed it well in simple words..i liked it though cz it hd so much of emeotions in it! |
by Gem
"Kiss me like it's our last day here, |
Yes, I can imagine you got emotional. This is a very powerful love poem. It describes in detail what we as women want from our men. Or at least in my P.O.V. I also agree the ending was not weak, the whole poem spoke volumes about feeling and wants, and ended nicely. I only found one small problem that I would fix and that would only be the spelling of one word. |
by Vanessa
Wow that was beautifully written, I thought everything in this poem was perfect except threw should be through. Absoulty amazing word choice dripping with deep powerful emtions of love. Keep up the good work. |
by David
Yes, love is strong thru out this whole poem. so yeah, the ending was different from the rest but i thought the whole poem was so sweet and loving. |
"Kiss me like it's our last day here, |
I didn't feel the ending was weak at all, I actually loved the last 2 lines of the poem. The emotion was really strong and the pain & sadness was in every line. Great job 5/5 |
by Brittany C
Very nice poem. I loved the words you used and the way the poem flowed. I think that it is a lovely love poem. I gave it a five out of five:) |
by firexdancer
Okay. don't worry, it was a gorgeous poem, i would just probably look at the spelling a bit, because there are a few misspellings, but besides that it really is beautiful, so sweet, i wish i had someone that made me that happy!!! lol. |
by Corey
Not bad, as you stated last line kinda weak, so no comment. Nice imagery. possibly make it longer? not sure, the only reason the ending was weak was because it was somewhat abrupt. |
by Sweet lig
Absolutely nice and pretty good.. u've been really epxress what makes u botherd and it has a great starting..and to the end as well.. i like all whole message thoug! some lines are very worded and very clearl.. nice work and well done! 5/5 |
Fairly simple, but the rhymeing sceme meant it flowed well and still deserved a five on the vote. I liked the style of the poem and the dedication of the passion put into it. |
by Fluffy
Very good. You've structured a good love poem with a strong, solid flow of rhyming couplets. The imagery and figurative language are vivid and help the piece flow as well as it does. In order to improve, I would only suggest alternating this line from: |
Great work i liked the hole poem but my favoret line would have to be" show me light in every thing dark" |
by Fsams
Superb with an awsome flow n nice selection of words with strong meanings. wow 5.5 |
by heather
U are indeed a very powerful writer. |
by Kait
This was actually a really good poem. i loved it. yes, the ending can use some work but do it when your ready. other than that it was really good. 5/5! |
This is really cute. |