Trapped Within His Deadly Love

Excellent poem! The imagery was amazing... I could picture everything... it's very good... definatly a 5/5! Very good at describing pain... I especially like these lines:

I'm trapped within his hollow hell
Locked within this empty cell.
He had the key to my heart,
But instead he left it chained with bars.

Very well written and flow was good too! :-) Take care...5/5!

There were a lot of great lines in this one that really stood out. Although the line "Not thinking with him" is kind of wierd. For the most part you kept a great flow throughout this piece. 5/5

marcella

Great poem with an awesome flow and beautiful rhymes. Its really catching. Keep it up

I'm trapped within his hollow hell
Locked within this empty cell.

Nice lines

Aww, this was a great poem! I totally agree with EndOfTheBeginning, the wording was great, there was imagery... passion...vivid feelings... it was great, a little bit of everything. :) Wonderful Job! Keep up the writing m'dear, you've really got a talent for it. :)

Much love and care!

I loved it. 5/5!