I like it but it dosen't gel . It dosen't seem to fit together like it should but the overall poem is good but I think u could fix it and whats with the Love hate thing it kinda took away from it to...

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Simply Jacob missed the point me thinks.

The structure could be a little more reformed to *gel* better, but honestly it works as is. It's a stunning piece as usual baby. its relateable, loveable and understandable.

the end, seems slightly sudden though, maybe structure hints into it? like snide comments or something if you're worried about that.

Me loves you =]
xx

5/5 hunny i havent been online in ages but im happy to see tht ur poems are still brilliant

much love xxxxx

I really loved the overall message. And the way you express the love|hate relationship was beautiful and true.
It's not very often that you find a poem that yalmost everyone can relate too.
Great job!
5/5
((Amber))

You are still writing amazing work. Thw words paint an emotional picture and I truly enjoy how you do that.

Danm nice/good/excellent