I'm trying here,
For that, you gotta give me props.
I'm trying so hard to let go,
To get my heart to stop.

Usually, I wouldn't be all that happy at a poem with a slang.
Because... well it just doesn't work.
But in here, dearest.
You actually made it work.
Lol.
Try to stay away from like.
It's a very ugly term used by most teenagers.
I have to admit... I use it as well.
Thank gawd not in poetry.
Lol.
One look and I'm done again,
I drop and hit the ground.
My strength gets pulled away from me,
And I lose my way around.

That doesn't sound forced.
But it does sound a bit rocky.
I don't know why... the flow was just.
Blah.
Slangs and smart words just doesn't mix that well.
Condone,
I believe is a smart word
because I don't use it in a normal conversation, is weird when it's in a poem
That used props.
I don't know.
All in all.
This poem is okay.
Not the best I've read from you.
Lol.
I've only read two from you.
So...
You kinda get the deal.
4/5?

So here I am, pleading,
As my world's going black.
I'm asking you to let me go,
And stop pulling me back.

has to be my favorite part of all of it. It is a little rocky nut the word choice and emtion covers that up. excellent work, keep it up.

I liked this poem alot, i do agree i usually HATE poems that have slang throughout them and refuse to even look at them but dear you pulled it off beautifully. I think you used the word "like" a little too much throughout it, it made this poem seem typical like a childs poem but other then that i found the emotion to be strong and portrayed quite nicely. Well done on this piece of poetry good effort~mel

I know how it feels to just want to stop loving and caring for somebody, but the harder we try and forget the more we end up thinking about them. The poem was nicely written and it had good flow - excellent job 5/5

I loved this work...though it had a li'l slang used....it did have a good effect on the readers..lol...n the emotions well well penned n as such the flow was good but maybe better choice of words could add to the intensity...other thn that the poem is well written!
Kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

Wow.. I was really tempted to sing.. I really the ords.. so emotional.. and yet I reallly liekthe rhymes.. there isn't anything that I really change.. becuae I love it the way it is..but anyway good job and keep up the work .. 5/5

I loved how you brought the title in at the end.
Shows the importance.
All in all I enjoyed the poem, its seemed a little easy tho.
Not forced, but just not quite outstanding you know?

It was still very good.
A lot better than some I've read. =]

Well done on your vocab as wel.

xo

Yes i can totally relate.....and sumtimes its easier to tell sumone to just leave u alone so ur heart dont break even more! <3