Wow.. this poem is spectacular.. i absolutely LOVE this part "Is it that you can't love me,
Or is it that you won't?" its soo clever.. its such a unique thought i never would have been able to come up with.. the whole poem is filled with wonderful wording and a easy to read flow.. keep it up :D

Bound by painful recollections
Wonderful line :]
A smile so demure...
That just kind of ruined my flow.
You should add some more syllables in that.
Second stanza?
The beginning was kind of cliched.
But then when you said
Or is it that you won't?
I was like... okay, maybe not.
Lol.
Why is she so much better than me?
That's pretty long, not as short as your
Other lines in that stanza.
Make it shorter?
Dirt...
I don't know, I just don't like that word.
Your ending, girl-o?
Wonderful?
It kindn of reminds me of a story I had
In 4th or 5th grade.
I don't want to tell you unless you actually
Want to know.
Lol.
But still.
I thought it was going to be kind of...
Dull should I say?
But the ending was SUPERB!
All in all, wonderful write, dearest.
5/5?

I loved this poem, best i've read from you. The word choice was strong and flowed beautifully causing alot of strong and power emotions. The flow of this whole poem to be was great. Truely an amazingly written piece of poetry you have written here. Well done 5/5~mel

This one was..i guess one of your best works i've read till now...lovely...n amazing!i soo loved the ending...just beautiful n word choice is wonderful...5/5 for this well written wrk!

xxPoojaxx

I know how you feel...life is a pain like that....5/5

WOw i know what you mean nice poem 5/5

Wow your poem is soo powerful and deep it made me want to read more.. honestly there isn't anything that I would change about it because its amzing and I hope you know that you got talent and never forget that.. good job and keep up the work.. 5/5

Good job, decent flow , sometimes it was choppy and you could have used stronger words, but over all nice job.

WOW this is very powerful! it was simply beautiful! well done! very emotional! you're really talented! you should be proud! haha! anyway flow was flawless! 5/5! as always well done.

My favorite Stanza:

Like a shriveled rose,
Slowly falling apart, one by one.
Trying to repair the past,
And fix what's been undone.

^ I like the imagery in that stanza! good job!

As always, you have took me to a different world where i think of my situation as its related your your poems.
the rhyming was the greatest in this one. so greatly written. keep it up dear.
5/5

I really liked this one. For all the reasons I liked the other two poems of your's I r/r/c. Also I can relate with this one a little more than the other's. I gave it a 5/5.

So I'm waiting for an answer:
Why is she so much better than me?
What makes her everything,
That I can never be?

it realy relates to me... nicely panned poem take care 5/5

Creativity and hard work were put in this poem very very good work another great piece of art

laura

Great job.....plz check out sum of my work!!!