First stanza?
Perfect.
Second stanza?
Last line seemed kind of shaky.
Third stanza?
Flowed wonderfully, m'dear :]
Fourth stanza...
Erase this chalky word [[I�m]] in
I doubt that you want to keep it like that.
Lol.
Although this poem does seemed "cliched"
I love the flow of it.
I didn't have to stop or anything when I read it.
It just went vroom.
Perfectly.
Your grammar and spelling was great as well :].
5/5 :]

Iâ??m -Simple mistake just needs to be fixed up. I loved the first stanza it was great it flowed nicely and was written with care. The flow was good throughout this poem and i found the vocab to be much better in this poem. Structure good and so was grammer. Well done with this peice of poetry.~mel

The words in this poem were so powerful and the imagery was quite good as well. I could picture the stanza's in my head so well. amazing job 5/5

I really liked this, it had brilliant flow and imagery x

The first stanza was flippin` BEAU-Ti-FUL ! Drew me in from the very start -- Like a (as cheesy as it sounds) spell being cast [: I loved the use of like a cluttered old home .

Erase this chalky word I'm in

Was chalky "word" realy meant to be word or was it supposed to be world ? I can`t make sense of it x)

But dang`, great imagery . I can relate to it -- I` think I`m in love with this poem(:
..__MiNDYY

Awww. thats so sad! ur a beautiful writer. i have read a few of your poems and they are wonderful.

xo kisses xo

Wow! i love the last line.. its cute

I love it sooo much, it so well writting, you have gotten so good rebeccaa, no joke. your amazing. and all your writting has such good discription. keep it up babes<3

OMG this ones amazing..i really enjoyed it and i like to relate to it..ugh fdbghfb i just don't know what to say its really good but another grammer mistake which i know you didnt intend "Cause after all the things your said" change the your to you.

This was great. I really like this. The slant rhyming gave it nice flow, and teh words just kept my attention. they were great detailed words.

5/5!

I love this. it's so very true..and the emotion in it is greatly portrayed. good job and keep it up! i absolutely love your writting. all the best =]