Very good poem with a lot fo talent. i am sorry you have been through this and i hope you do get lifted back up again. i hope you fnid your happiness. take kare and keep writing xxxx

To be completely honest, the lack of punctuation, capitols and fully spelt words was a totaly turn off. ^^;;

Though I enjoy your imagery that you expertly spun together with a handful of obvious, undisguised words and ideas. You had a faulty flow, and a sort of tense in places that almost seemed to be close to Shakespearian times.

I loved the concept of the poem, and everything made sense, even with a few sprinkles of riddles you put in there. Well Done. x)

W.O.W. very good write! And I love how you put the three strikes part, it really emphises the meaing of the poem. I think you have really taken the saying of '' writing poetry is not about writing about what everone knows, but writing about what they know and putting it in a diffrent light'' and made it your own.
bravo again!

6/5