by heather
Mkay, 2 start off im so glad u asked me 2 look @ ur poem! when i read it i can really understand ur passion behind it. here's my favorite lines: |
Excellent job on the poem ,very well done ,had lots of meaning behind it great write, keep up the good work, your friend Tracy for all your thoughts and feelings you put in it ~5/5 |
by Aken Sol
Crush on an older woman much? |
by amanda flood
Wow anthony i smiled all the way reading ure poem, excellent i love it, that is so sweet, is it about me lol excellent love keep up the great work well done 10-10 |
by Shandy
Wow!its a great poem.i like the words you choose to describe how you feel.Thanks for asking me to read it .It's great.<3 |
by Gasttlee
I really like this! Keep on writing! 5/5 |
I love it.. its completely honest and open.. its good.. |
This reminds me of the eight pages of unrestricted passion I wrote to my “would be†love. There is something sublime about poetry. I would secure a copy of this poem if I were you. Love is mysterious, yet you may find the mystery is the main attraction. I enjoyed reading this it brings back memories |
by J Lau
Nice write. This poem was a mirroring image of what I went through and how I started writing poetry, so I can definitely relate. I sense the strong feelings and emtions you had for her and I wish that you will find that true love one day. As for the poem... well... it's a bit scary... it's more of a piece of heart felt writing. Give it a bit more break... structure it... condense it a bit to hook the reader on to read more... don't scare them off right away. It's a nice write... don't get me wrong, but maybe even break it into a couple of different poems... Afterall, how can one express all the emotions for someone he loves in just one piece? Keep up the good work! |
by Kristy
It was a good poem. You can see the emotions in what you write. Keep writing. =) |
by nikki
Wow, great poem, so well written. and you can see it means alot to you by the way you wrote it, the wording was perfect. it's a definite 5 from me, and i added you as one of my fave's, maybe you could do the same. it was great, kepp writing. :) |
You plainly speak from the heart in "Ms. Nelson Has No Idea". Giving yourself to a poem so completely like this is time consuming as well as draining. I enjoyed it for its honesty and passion. |
Hey, i am glad you told me about your poem. Good work, keep it up. I will check regularly if anything new will pop up. |
by Debbie
I agree with J Lau. Despte the fact that you attach sincere and heartfelt emotions to your poem, the shifting of ideas definitely makes it tedious... Focusing only of one idea in every write you make, in my humblest opinion, will definitely augment your write-ups to a new higher level. You've got the emotions necessary to a poem and wonderful ideas as well, but your concentration of one idea at a time is inadequate. Other than that, it's a lovely, promising, romantic work. Keep on writing and eventually your star will shine brighter than the sun's. :) |
by honeypot
Nice work! Heartfelt and real. |
by Liz
Thatz really good. thanx for leaving me a message about it. |
by kayla
Anthony! That is soo good! and that's the sweetest thing I've ever read. It'd be nice if you could look at some of my poems for me, and comment/rate them. Thanks! ♥ |
Hmm...rather contrasting on a simple topic...nice one, it appeals to me rather as a song lyrics or a short story rather than a poem..and well, it's good...=) |
by becca
WOW! this poem is seeped in so much emotion! it is so strong and ur love and desire for this women is so clear. im rly glad u asked me to read it! its a a really beautiful piece of work and is rly powerful! definately keep it up and keep writin! xXx |
by erely
Your feelings read true and intense... |