Comments : Evil Invention

  • 17 years ago

    by xoxShorteexox

    I think it was a good poem. I didn't find it confusing. I know what you mean by a mirror being an evil invention. Some don't like what stares back at them. I think it was a lovely poem. Keep up the good work.
    5/5

    -Heather

  • 17 years ago

    by Fsams

    True words dear v true. This is a useful poem and v well written piece with a nice flow. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Excellent write...very well written...simple sad and profound write
    very lovely poem..filled with emotions
    Kp it up!
    5/5

    xxPoojaxx

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Its an evil little = It's an evil little

    First of all, the poem seems unfinished. Second of all, you seem to be missing

    BRB

  • 17 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Forgettings = Forgetting's

    Thinking what = Thinking Of What

    Oh yes, I got = Oh yes, I got It;

    Its = It's

    Back again. Yesterday the bell rang and I had to go to class.

    But as I was saying, your poem seems unfinished... it seems too open ended and questionable. That isn't a good thing...
    You need to first of all make your poem hard hitting, or at least the ending must be. You have to make sure that your poem has a reason for being written, of which you do have. I just think you need to add more emotion into this poem.

    Also, you need to add punctuation at the end of your lines so that people reading your poem will know what to do when they come to the end of a line instead of reading it all in one big "breath".

    All the same, good word use.

    5/5
    ~Stephen White