Awww...this is soo filled wth hurt thoughts n fading hope n fera n lots and lots of emeotions....hey on a personal line..i think u shud never give up hope..n find confidence in yourself....believe tht watever u r u r blessed...then lol...u'll find the whole world befoire you respecting u.....just a thought!=) |
Oww, this is sad, i know how you feel.. bit... "were" should be "where" you missed the h lol. a 5/5 for it though!! |
Wow, i thought this was very depp. something that someone would have to really search for the right words to write it and you did, i thought it was amazing and nicely penned, 5/5 |
by Roxy
This poem is really deep and emotional, very personal too. |
by SADADDY
I agree with the majority of the comments already posted that you have written a very deep and presonnel emotional write. You should not be afraid to show ho you really are young lady. May you one day find the peace and joy you seek in your heart each and everyday. Take care young lady and keep on writing. |
I really like the topic you wrote about, everybody has things about them self they don't like, especially with apppearance. the reality is we can't change these things, people will love you for you don't worry. I thought your poem was excellent and the ideas to, but your flow is off in spots. Adding or subtracting words that aren't needed will help your flow. Your a great writter and you'll only get better with time. Fantastic poem 5/5 |
by Brittany C
I really liked this poem. It is a great write and the word choice was nice. Keep up the great work. 5/5 |
Some things are just destined to be concealed =P Well written lovely topic. Maybe I will begin a piece on a similar topic. When I'm finished I will share it with you to see what you think =) |