My unending dream

by The Poet Behind The Poems   May 24, 2007


If you can pls commet and rate this poem ill do one of yours in return this one meens alot to me xxxx

Watching you ... all the time
Thinking one day I hope that you could be mine
Theres a part of me thats empty that only love can fill
When you look at me you make the whole world stand still

Id cry a million tears if you were not around
Id cry so hard that oceans would be the ground
Im just trying to make you see that your the one for me
That if we got together forever we will be

As I look up into the stars shinning in the sky
I realize ive found true love when im looking in your eyes
Baby I swear my feelings for you im not pretending
Your the girl for me my dream thats unending

When your lying with me babe you have nothing to fear
You can feel how much I love you when im holding you near
And as I lay here with you I feel my heart beat
Its never beat like that before it must mean its complete

When we are together and your looking in my eyes
I cant take my eyes away its like im hypnotized
Its the same when you smile apart from one thing
To see you smile because of me ... a tear of happiness it brings

Ive said all I can ive unlocked my heart just to you
I no you wont believe me but everything ive said is the truth
I just hope that one day you will say yes and together we will be seen
So that everyone can see that ive finally got my unending dream

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  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    The strcuture is good and i like the rhymes as well, the flow isn't always that continuous but that's alright. I'm sure everybody can relate to what you've mentioned in the first stanza. Those who haven't experienced that yet definately miss out on something It's always good to truely care for someone and grow feelings for them, may they be returned or not.
    I like your word choice in the second stanza. You describe your feelings with a specific simplicity, that's so great. The situation you're describing is really sad and the way you're expressing your emotions is just great. I think it was a good idea to end this stanza positive anyway.
    The third stanza is filled with pure emotions of love and happiness. I was able to feel the honesty and the love you feel for that person, since it's obviously heartfelt. I would probably end up melting to this part if someone wrote that for me :P
    Now to the fourth stanza: I believe it is the best that could happen, to make your loved ones smile and be happy. Their happiness means so much to usself, since it is their satisfaction that satisfies us or their smile that makes us smile.
    The last stanza is the perfect ending! You wanted to say what you had to say though you knew the opposite may not believe your words, yet all you've said contains so much passion and love. I really liked this poem! Whoever this was written for has to like it.

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    Somehow the way you write your love poems is just so close to mine .. That's why I really enjoyed reading this one ..

    Keep it up ..

    5/5

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