Comments : My unending dream

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    Somehow the way you write your love poems is just so close to mine .. That's why I really enjoyed reading this one ..

    Keep it up ..

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    The strcuture is good and i like the rhymes as well, the flow isn't always that continuous but that's alright. I'm sure everybody can relate to what you've mentioned in the first stanza. Those who haven't experienced that yet definately miss out on something It's always good to truely care for someone and grow feelings for them, may they be returned or not.
    I like your word choice in the second stanza. You describe your feelings with a specific simplicity, that's so great. The situation you're describing is really sad and the way you're expressing your emotions is just great. I think it was a good idea to end this stanza positive anyway.
    The third stanza is filled with pure emotions of love and happiness. I was able to feel the honesty and the love you feel for that person, since it's obviously heartfelt. I would probably end up melting to this part if someone wrote that for me :P
    Now to the fourth stanza: I believe it is the best that could happen, to make your loved ones smile and be happy. Their happiness means so much to usself, since it is their satisfaction that satisfies us or their smile that makes us smile.
    The last stanza is the perfect ending! You wanted to say what you had to say though you knew the opposite may not believe your words, yet all you've said contains so much passion and love. I really liked this poem! Whoever this was written for has to like it.