Dearest Heart: Part 4

Great job once again. you are a really good writer. well done! 5/5

~Chelsea~

My apologies for posting twice. But I meant to say "who's" instead of "whose". Thanks. :)

"You are [too] cold and analytical to understand passion and irrelevance."

I absolutely adore that statement. It's quite true. The objective mind can never understand the subjective mind, unless both of them unite and work together as a team. I love it!

"You, however, are the foolish one."

Ooh. That line simply creates tension. For such a short statement, it holds so much powerful emotion and strength in its [tone of] voice. She wouldn't yield to the mind's wishes then, eh? Interesting... I'll be looking forward for the next part then.

"...and you know deep down She was tired of listening to your cold calculating way of thinking."

I, too, like Kitty, am confused with the true identity of "She"! But then again, when I reread that portion, I realized then that you meant to speak of the person whose confused inside! The one who possesses the Mind and the Heart! Haha. Wonderful write, as always, m'dear. XD Debbie

Very nice once again...though the formal style is beginning to create problems...makes it feel like there is a bit of a wall, yet it also creates another level of connection between the two...odd...

This keeps getting better and better, i really love this defiantly suspenseful, the word choice again was amazing, and the emtion was again clear. I have to read more. 5/5