Great job sweetie! I loved the whole story line. It was definately different and refreshing to read a new type of work around here! I love you oodles and oodles!

<3 love love love <3
Your Wifey

Whoa. im lost at she, but i still like it.

hmm..this is sorta late, but why not mind instead?

That was neat and once again true. It's amazing to know what the heart feels compared to what the head thinks its feeling.

Well done, i liked it, but it wasnt long enough and i didnt really enjoy the ending, it was too abrubt and hrash.
but a good read none the less
love Tara-Kay
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Very good.. i liked this one also.. i agee with the other people who commented on this.. it was a bit harsh but thats how our mind is.. "it" does not know love or passion.. another 5/5.. oh yeah i think this flowed well also..

Hey,
the mind can be a bit harsh sometimes but thats just life..it flows nicely and im going to read the other part right now! 5/5
kisses stephanie

Hmm..this series makesme think so much. you've got a way with words, u get the emotions just right, guess, out of experience =] great work once again, the last sentence was my favourite ;) xx

This keeps getting better and better, i really love this defiantly suspenseful, the word choice again was amazing, and the emtion was again clear. I have to read more. 5/5

Very nice once again...though the formal style is beginning to create problems...makes it feel like there is a bit of a wall, yet it also creates another level of connection between the two...odd...

"You are [too] cold and analytical to understand passion and irrelevance."

I absolutely adore that statement. It's quite true. The objective mind can never understand the subjective mind, unless both of them unite and work together as a team. I love it!

"You, however, are the foolish one."

Ooh. That line simply creates tension. For such a short statement, it holds so much powerful emotion and strength in its [tone of] voice. She wouldn't yield to the mind's wishes then, eh? Interesting... I'll be looking forward for the next part then.

"...and you know deep down She was tired of listening to your cold calculating way of thinking."

I, too, like Kitty, am confused with the true identity of "She"! But then again, when I reread that portion, I realized then that you meant to speak of the person whose confused inside! The one who possesses the Mind and the Heart! Haha. Wonderful write, as always, m'dear. XD Debbie

My apologies for posting twice. But I meant to say "who's" instead of "whose". Thanks. :)

Great job once again. you are a really good writer. well done! 5/5

~Chelsea~