Pretty language, you seem to have a good grasp of rhyming...

Perhaps something that's not so... Textbook?
Branch it out a little bit. There are so many poems out there that read so similar to this[granted this is a wonderful poem, I don't mean to degrade it!]
Just, a change of pace would be awesome...
I read this because a post asked me to... It also said you went to jail?
Well, I bet there aren't a lot of poems around here based on that. And honestly, I'd much rather read something new that I haven't read three-thousand-twenty-something-or-so times.

You asked for constructive criticizm. I suppose it's not so much constructive criticizm as it is a suggestion. I'll vote and give it a 5, because the level of poetry is all there.
It's just the theme I'm unimpressed with.

Hope you're okay with that!
--SP

The poem reflects darkness in a mysterious way, and the faith in the next life is a weak maybe, therefore I believe the poem hit its mark as a dark poem. The flow is flawless and mesmerizing in a thought provoking way. My suggestion would be to leave this one the way it is as a reference to the darkness one may desire to escape in this life

Very, very, very nice! i loved it! very nice write. keep up the good work.
god bless

Very strong poem. you could feel the emotion present. keep it up!