I liked it alot but i think it might be able to be improved upon...

-glenn

I agree with glenn, I think you can improve this. Nice flow to it, and pretty short. I think I know what the message in this but not for sure.

Yeah a feeling of someone who is disappointed in what life brings and who lose all his hopes! I liked this one...Keep up the good work!

You really don't like sloths do you... =P. Kidding, I love it. It can be interpreted in lots of ways.

Great write.

Thank you for your comment ^^ I really like your poems =) I love this one little bit more 5/5