Soldier of love

by hookliensinker   May 25, 2007


There is a little girl i know
she is oh so beautiful
with the sun rise in her eyes
no one can deny,

she is the pretiiest pearl, the ocean can own.
to men, she a queen.
eyes can not deny the beaty that she brings.

alone she stands
goping that one day her prince will come and rescue her from this agony and grief.
but nobody ever does.

so she waits,
wondering if she is worthy of love..
so she waits more.

months have passesd her by
and now all she ever does is cry,,
asking her self, ( if the sun is shinning)
why am i still crying..,

this is just from top of my head. sorry if it doesent rhyme, its not supposed to. and sorry for the spelling mistakes, english is my second language.
feel free to critisise. ( i dont care)

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  • 17 years ago

    by Phoenix

    I really like this poem! it is lovely!
    Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by hookliensinker

    Thank you.

  • 17 years ago

    by kitkat girl

    This is a very good poem and really good for english being your second language. I have one suggestion at the below part:
    "goping that one day her prince will come and rescue her"
    Instead of goping it should be hoping.
    Below is my favorite part from your poem:

    "months have passesd her by
    and now all she ever does is cry,,
    asking her self, ( if the sun is shinning)
    why am i still crying..,"
    keep it up.
    peace

  • 17 years ago

    by hookliensinker

    Thank you for your comment.
    i done that while i was at work.
    i was bored.

  • 17 years ago

    by redneck

    That was a very good poem. is really from the top of your head?it was really good

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