I Trusted You

Love this poem!

This is the fourth time I`ve tried comenting this poem -.- Internet is being a fag . So sorry if this isn`t lengthy .

My favourite lines were:
`I trusted you
For a love that meant my life.

Totally sweet wihtout being cheesy . Overall, I think you did a good job with this . I feel that you could done better with the ending, it just wasn`t as strong as the rest of the poem, but I still enjoyed it [:

I love this poem, it is what i am going through right now and i couldnt have put it in better words.
ps thanx for the comment

Thinking you are innocent.
^ "were" not "are"

Thinking you have trust on me.
^ "had" not "have" and i think it would be better if it was "in" not "on"

You will tell everyone in this city.
^ "would" not "will"

Awh, this was really good. I loved how it had such a simple structure but so much meaningg. The words you used were good and there was lots of emotion and even a bit of irony in there. Nicely done. 5/5

Sorry hone for being away for a while, you know i had personal problam and it was not that easy to handle. thank you for the concern, I got your message the other day. it was very nice of you. you are so sweet.

I like this poem because it is again written by you and it seems like it has its own perpase that cannot be reveled easily. i know you.lol.
again nice poem that we enjoyed. waiting for the poem you told me about. please post it soon.