by Anthony smith May 25, 2007
category :
Friendship, family /
broken friendship
Do you really know what a best friend is, |
by amanda flood
Wow anto that poem is excellent, well done |
Seriously, one thing that I really like about your stuff is that it gives me a certain thing to think about, like it tells of a single story, and uncomplete story, simply interesting... |
by amanda flood
Well done anthony another excellent poem great, so take it u are around 20something and u live in america am i right, so what makes you right great poems please tell me u wright so well |
by Debbie
If I may suggest, maybe breaking it into stanza form will enhance the flow? It was a fine, promising piece of work that could be improved in every other ways possible. You've got good ideas in this poem--what a friend is like, how one doesn't judge others without knowing them, how others seem to find a way to your heart, and etc--which could be written in different poems as well. Applying these ideas in just one piece is tedious and stressing to the reader. In my humblest opinion, writing each idea individually would be wonderful. Hey, now, don't get me wrong. It was fine the way it is (as I presumed that this is your own style of writing), but then again, if you're willing to enhance it, then please do so. I'd love to read more of your works in the near future...Peace Profundis... |
by nikki
Wow it was greatly penned. i loved it, it was sad, emotional you could tell it cam str8 from the heart. i gave you a 5/5. and definitly added you in my favouries. keep it up |