Why is there a comma in this sentence?
For[[,]] he's aged beyond his immature days.

[[as fake as me and you.]]
I don't like this line.
It sounds pretty cliched.

DARN!
I accidently pressed comment....
But continuing on.

For, the tears of a clown never show.
Love that line, dearest.
It's sweet and mysterious and the same time.

Again, I'm going pessimistic and say
I don't like this line...
Which is why we shall never know.
It doesn't sound like an ending.
It just sounds as though you're trying to force an ending.
Which is...
Not that great.

All in all.
I love your words.
Your grammar?
Okay.
Spelling was perfect.
All in all... 5/5?

This was very Sad.. but i liked it..

I dont think i seen anything wrong in this one.. your Grammer and spelling were good.. i think you had really good word choice in this one.

The flow and Rhyme were really good also..

I give a 5/5

Very sad but still very good. I liked the concept and the ending, keep up the good work, 5/5

Beautiful poem with a sad message. It's these kind of people that are shunned in society and will come back to haunt us. We need to care for them, show them they are useful. Beautiful write. Make sure you edit your poems and go over the grammar. There were a few grammar mistakes but overall the poem was great. Thank you for entering the contest. I look forward to reading more from you.