Wow, I liked this one alot. It was different than the type of poetry styles I like, but still, this one just hit me like a plane hits the skies. Wonderful.

The Angel of Secrets

Intriguing. It isn't the best I've read, but you have attempted to uphold this piece through vivid imagery and repetition, which, however, has not worked as well as in the prior piece. Nonetheless, there is an underlying flow which, when read in your head, can be interpreted as rhythmic.

I like how you repeated the line "Welcome to the mourning palace" in almost every stanza, it gave the poem a nice, round feel. You used strong vocabulary, which I liked. The flow ws just a bit off in a few spots, but it really didn't make the poem all that bad. I'll give it a 5/5.