Great job on this one! you are a very talented writer! 5/5 ~love and trust

I love the way that you mentioned different transitions of one's life in this poem. This was a wonderful read. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

Only if we stop and think what we do in our this short life, lol.
a true poem written greatly with a grea tmessage. keep it up dear.

For the most part you don't see alot of humanitain poems and when you do it is real breif and fleeting. I am happy to see you have got a nack for it and I hope you nuture it for when used correctly you have the power to change the course of the world with just a few words Plot121

Th feeling that you reflected on this poem were amazing..The topic was great and so true that everyone can sometimes relate to
But just a little suggestion

i try=I try

Well done,
Laura

I liked this piece it showed a lot of emotion the strucher was thought out very well I have only seen one thing that would improve this poem the line "I never used to worried about a girl" should be I never used to be worried about a girl.