Excellent Tayanna u have beautifully described how the child is deprived of the very things that other children have. Good selection of words with a catching flow. great 5/5

With love
Fsams

Beautiful....it's so so touching..n the meaning n the message it gets across is just beautiful..n powerful...u've penned it with simple yet strong words
lovely job!
kp it up!
5/5!
=)
xxPoojaxx

Oh my...this is so touching... when we think that some children can't afford what we consider normal... txeeeeee, you made me think...
the poem itself is wonderful, the flow is really nice and the wording is really strong...
5/5
keep going
*isabel*

"God she's to younge to ride in a hearse."
^ Should be "young" not "younge"

Awhh, this was really sad hunnyy. The flow was good, the descrpitons great, the emotion clear, and the idea great. The only thing i thought was wrong was not having continued the rhyme scheme into the last stanza. I know it shoudlnt matter in a poem this deep but I think if you start one you should finish it or it messes up the flow. 5/5

Touching and so sad, I really liked the imagery
that was absoulty amazing. I have no crtisim to offer this poem is perfect. really take a bow on a job well done. 5/5

This was beautifully sad. The emotions portrayed were quite strong deep and powerful. I found this poem to have a good meaning behind it as it opens peoples eyes up to poverty and the problems children go through when in poverty. Well done. ~mel

This poem was amazing. alot of emotion put into it. its really sad that stuff is true. well done. 5/5

~Chelsea~

I liked this poem. It sends out a strong message about proverty and how it can affect a kid. I gave this poem a 5/5.

Thats so sad.. That really is an eye opener.. you can really see the emotion you put into this poem. I enjoyed reading this a lot.. i thought the flow and rhyme were really good.. and great word choice.. 5/5

Hey..this poem i one of those which tends to bring a tear to the eye. a very contraversial subject, and a very emotional write. good rhythm and flow and nice straight forward message at the end too. relates greatly to some of my poems...your poem touched my heart =] nuf luv xx

Not many people tackle issues such as this, the whole poverty in other countries thing but it's nice to see that change, good format and good write

your servant:
atticus