An awesome poem, the emotion is over powering, so intense and deep.
The poem is brought to life with the imagery and sadness.
A great poem, my friend
much love, Tara-Kay
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Another beautiful poem from you. The language use was good, I like the structure of the poem. Choice of words was good! You're really talented :) 5/5 as always!

I liked the introduction you have to this poem, with a simple use of alliteration. First anf formost while reading the pooem the read comes across a poetic tecnique. A good start. I og on to read the "downfall of drops," it makes me wonder what you meant. I mean are you describing the rain? If you are i really like the fact you didnt say "she was crying inb the rain" or something similar. The rest of the stanza makes me think your talking about self harm. When reading the secound stanza you used "her body" again. I wasnt a big fan of this as you had just used it. I noticed you use allieration quite a few times in this read. The vocxbulary of the poem was brilliant and it had a really good flow to it. To improve your work i suggest you use a more varied punctuation along with enjambment. Keep writing! xx

Body; set free = body, set free (semi-colon is improper for use in this way)

Interesting poem. Although it was quite difficult to read this poem with a seemingly forced intricate vocabulary, I did enjoy this unique poem. It was difficult to follow until the very last line, where I suddenly understood the whole poem. It reminds me of a poem about many of the movies about excorcisms and the such, and however it reminds me of those movies, it still remains truly unique in my eyes. Well done with this poem, and keep the ink flowing.

5/5
~Stephen White