For we have now defeated the regimes,
And because, the true beauty lies,
Behind the disguise;
And simplicity is never what it seems.
^^Beautiful llines...
i loved the way this write started...great n the message conveyed thru this one is soo good...it's hard to get a message as this one thru poems...u've managed it well enough...n i liked the way u've penned it
nice job...but certainly not your best..=)
5/5!
xxPoojaxx

Interesting subject. I liked the ending, too. So simple and clear, yet very controversial. Nicely done. I enjoyed reading.

This poem qas quite interesting to me. The first stanza was great it had my attention. I felt as though in some lines you repeated yourself, i think if you changed that this meaning porrtrayed would become clearer to other people. I found the meaning to be great none the less. Well done~mel

Wow... that carries a powerful message. Just wow, that's all I can seem to say. It rocks. It speaks of how others judge people and how they never seem to be right. People should just accept people and see that the people they shun are the most beautiful on the inside. You can always make it through abuse. Everything was very well done 5/5 for sure!!!

Much Love,
.:Danielle:.

Wow mez! its reli gud bt i swear to god u scare me!

Amazing write hun and great choice of words.. However, at times you repeated yourself which made your message a littly fuzzy..I still thought the message was great, if I got it right.. This poem shows you have great vocab also!! 5/5
Tyanna

It was full of truths and realities..It is usually hard to put realities on poems but you did a great job really
I especially liked those;

For we have now defeated the regimes,
And because, the true beauty lies,
Behind the disguise;
And simplicity is never what it seems.

Take care hunnie
Yours truly,
Laura

Very nicely written. In fact, I enjoyed reading this outstanding piece. Although the flow seemed unnatural at some lines, I actually find it easy to read on the whole. Atrocities are most likely one of human beings' specialties.

"You may have been an illicit child,
But the sun shone every time you smiled.'

I liked that couplet. It, like the sun's rays, gives hope in me. It also never failed to give me a smile :).

Furthermore, the ending lines endear me completely. In forsooth, finding true beauty in simplicity is a joy. Nicely written, nonetheless. A pleasurable read! 5/5 ~ Marian

Okay wow.
i REALLY REALLY enjoyed this.
my favourite lines were
"You may have been an illicit child,
But the sun shone every time you smiled."
thats beautiful and wonderful and A GORGEOUS description, that really touched me!
The rhyme scheme is realy awesome i dont think ive ever come across a good poem like this one using that sort of rhyme scheme, it wasnt forced or anything it was perfect and the descriptions and vocab you used was brilliant!
WELL DONE!!!
=]
Geo