by xPerfect Chaosx May 27, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
----STOP---- If you have not read the first 4 parts go back and do so now!! Thank you!!! |
by Debbie
The fact that the tension is beginning to heat up in the atmostphere interests me exceedingly. I loved how the mind was concerned for the heart's sake and for the person's well-being. His (the mind) actions definitely ignited a negative reaction from the heart. In addition, it's difficult for me, in all likelihood to the troubled individual, to take sides between the heart and the mind, because both of them certainly have very good points! :D Keep them coming, sweets! XD Debbie |
by George
I like the way the tension has grown...it seemed very formal up till now which did not seem right for this kind of dialogue. Now that its beginning to become more familiar it is getting so much better! |
by Vanessa
Well done, I loved this one too, the word choice again was excellent, and the emtion just keeps getting deeper and deeper, I really loved this. all of these parts fit togather wonderfully, and i would like to read more. 5/5 one more time |
by Mezmeryz
=] once again, your poem bought a smile to my face lol, its just so full of itself...feelings and emotions. the mind seems to be fed up of seeing 'her' hurt again and again by the hearts 'foolish'-ness. i wonder whats coming next...? gd luk...nuf luv xx 5/5 |
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