This one is very good debbers, love the imagery, how do u do it, all ur poems are great, this one is a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming babe!!!

Debbie
This is a wonderful piece. Love the word choices and imagery :)

...In a bell-clear morning

As a serrated spring

Divine...

These lines are really beutiful.
Take care Cindy

This was quite beautiful debbers. The title desire made me think of another love/lust bf gf poems but you just brought the word desire to a whole new level. I love your vocab it was astonishing. Purely an amazinly writte piece here. Well done~mel

Great poem very different what anything i have read very good thanks for the comment also

keenan

Wonderful, unique, excellently written... 5/5

This is done so perfectly and wriiten so gracefully.
your poems have an amazing meaning.

keep it up! =]]

Hey debs,
a wonderful poem, its very unique and I love the words, you're a great writer =)
you definitely deserve a 5/5 Hun !
kisses Stephanie

Beautiful selection of words and imagery.Brilliant write, enjoyed reading it.

Take care
chavii.

Simply lovely and a splendid choice od words.
Well done.

Steve

I personally love the set out. so new and fresh. i thought the ending was so powerful, just how a poem should be.

great work. you would have won the contest with a poem of this high standards.

5/5 David

Beautiful choice of wrds...and i liked the way you've created this peice..the atmosphere is beautiful ...I loved the imagery you created=)
Good job!
xxPoojaxx

You have talent. your work was nice. excellent use of words take care 5/5

Absolutely...Brilliant - and that's with a CAPITAL B, missy! :) Haha. This piece has left me in awe. The structure, use of engaging repetition and words strung with such delicacy...this is…oh, I hate it when I am at a loss of words! :|

I can't criticize this. It isn't possible. And it would be entirely inhuman of me :|.
Haha! I adore your ability, the talent and the confidence to write in such a mature style. It's my new favourite poem. Excellent job!

Absolutely...Brilliant - and that's with a CAPITAL B, missy! :) Haha. This piece has left me in awe. The structure, use of engaging repetition and words strung with such delicacy...this is…oh, I hate it when I am at a loss of words! :|

I can't criticize this. It isn't possible. And it would be entirely inhuman of me :|.
Haha! I adore your ability, the talent and the confidence to write in such a mature style. It's my new favourite poem. Excellent job!

Very good vocab
hope you win the contest
nice work
i loved it
5/5

I really like how you write...hope read more

This poem was very short but very sweet, the words are strong and the flow is as well. The last few lines ended the poem perfectly, great job 5/5

Beautiful form......excellent word choices.....perfect.....5/5 Debbie

Wow like this one was a great poem... i like the style you use .. even though i would never use it lol to complicated for me anywas a 5/5 from me = ]

Wow. You're choice of words is excellent, they make the poem ring of beauty. I really enjoyed reading it. 5/5

Ravyn