Never Say Goodbye [Triquatrain]

The tear in your heart wishes you wouldn't start
This nonsense all over again
[[Honestly, I hate when people don't finish a line like that and make it two..]]

Goodbyes are always the end.
[[I don't know why, but I really like that line..]]

Hold your head up high as you yell to the sky
[[...yell to {I think to should be "at", but that's just suggestive wording} the sky {;}"]]

You know what to do, and yes, it involves you
No matter if it's wrong or right.
[[I love this rhyme and the whole meaning here. Perfect.]]

Okay. Now, this poem would not been anywhere near as good had you put it in any other form. Nice picking there.
Now, I didn't realize this was a poem about a boy; I was just reading and making up my own story, but you gave it away at the end. Don't do that; let the reader explore with their memory what /they/ want the poem to be. =]
But, I really enjoyed it, as I enjoyed the ending. Nicely done. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Great job. The structure was nice, as well as the wordings.

Oo, I liked this. I really like this style, and you did it justice. It's somewhat catchy, a bit like a pop song (haha, that's a compliment, really.)

"You know what to do, and yes, it involves you" - Here I thought you used 'you' too many times, it messes with the flow somewhat.

Anyhow, nice job.

Wow... I don't even know what to say. This poem is so amazing... I love the way that you write! This part's my favorite:

Hold your head up high as you yell to the sky
That youre finally over him.
What a waste of time, leading with your mind
Is better than committing the sin.

Once again, wow... Keep up the great writing!

This seems like a hard style to do ciao, but you did it great, for some reason it glitched, but its easy to edit the glitches, i give it a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming babe!!!